Dear God pt. 2

[theConductor]

Sup guys i wrote a verse and found it flowed pretty well with the dear God instrumental so i wrote a second one and this is what i came up with... The first verse is fictional and the second is basically true

Hes sitting on the curb with his face in his hands
Im guessin gettin fired kinda ruined his plans
He played in the sand now the evidence is right on his hands
He tried to cover it up but his boss made his career end
Hes been out of a job for eight weeks its so depressing
Hes been evicted three times and cars gone missin 
Hes stressin and fessin up to the things that hes said and done
But it doesnt matter because his wife and his kids are gone
Hes trying to stay strong but it just aint helpin him
He went out of control like a toyota and rolled right into sin
And now hes waitin for a bus he dont have money for
Hes tired of walkin becuz his blisterin feet are sore
He doesnt understand how anyone could be this poor
As hes starin across the street at the convenience store
So as he stands up he screams, "cant take it anymore!"
But as he looks to the sky his knees hit the floor


Im sittin the car tryin to talk to this girl
Who ive rele liked for some time shes got my head in a whirl
She's sweet, she's her own person and shes beautiful too
She makes me laugh and do things that i would never do
I gave her more than a clue of what i think of her
And i think she likes me back but im rele not sure
I asked her out a week ago and she said "not at the moment
Im still hurting from my last crush becuz hes gone and blown it"
So i told her id wait for her as long as it takes
For her to heal her emotional wounds and i dont fake
About it now she practically going out with my best friend
Theyre gonna make me jealous when i see them again
I no i shudnt be jealous but shes so great
And my best friends like my brotha ive nown him since we were eight
Months old i told him tht i like her too
But with things how they r he aint backing off anytime soon

[TweezyRocksMyIpod]

that was... depressing. but that was probably sort of the purpose. great rhymes! I liked the first verse best.

[theConductor]

Thanks for the input! I like the first verse better too. I felt like I rushed thru the second verse and i still am a little shaky with the flow of it when i try it haha

[TweezyRocksMyIpod]

haha!! yeah, it's still really good though! Keep it up, and some day you'll be really good! 

[theConductor]

Thanks! anyone else?

[theConductor]

yay people are going to open mic again yay! 

[Yungtown]

man heartbreaking bro.. I know that kind of situation and they are never anything fun.
Keep being real, and expressing yourself. God recognizes that heart and is always there looking out for you, no matter what your circumstance may entail.

Loving the post

[theConductor]

man heartbreaking bro.. I know that kind of situation and they are never anything fun.
Keep being real, and expressing yourself. God recognizes that heart and is always there looking out for you, no matter what your circumstance may entail.

Loving the post

Thanks man. it means a lot

[topman26]

Good one dude..keep doing nice work

[theConductor]

Thanks will do